Essay Feedback Tool — illustrative example

INPUT
Rubric requires claims to be supported. Student paragraph says: School gardens always improve science learning. No source or example follows. Give feedback without writing the essay.

RESULT
Passage to review: School gardens always improve science learning.
Issue: always is a universal claim, and the paragraph supplies no supporting evidence.
Revision task: find relevant evidence, explain what it actually shows and narrow the claim to the supported conditions.
Question for the writer: Which learning outcome and classroom situation do you mean?

REVIEW
Use the assignment rubric to prioritize feedback. Explain which passage needs work and why, while leaving the student responsible for the argument.

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